The Writers' Thread

**OpenYourEyes** · Posted: Thu Mar 18, 2010 5:52 am Post subject: The Writers' Thread

I know I'm not the only one who loves to write. I'm in six different bands, and I never have a problem writing for them all. I figured that the Music Discussion forum deserved a thread dedicated to blatant self promotion.

Post what you've written, help others out that need help with a poem/ song, critique other people's work, do something. I love getting feed back about my work, and I love reading other's work.

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**mdizzy** · Posted: Thu Mar 18, 2010 9:02 am Post subject:

Your lyrics are pretty solid, I myself would change the wording slightly in some instances but that is just me. Are these just lyrics you wrote or is there music to go with them?

there are different writing processes, me I mostly write the music and then write the lyrics to fit the music so...
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**OpenYourEyes** · Posted: Thu Mar 18, 2010 9:47 pm Post subject:

**TheLonging** · Joined: 07 Apr 2008 Posts: 4191

I have half a notebook full of lyrics. I should post some of them sometime.
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**mdizzy** · Posted: Fri Mar 19, 2010 3:16 am Post subject:

Lyrics for my new single, link to the song is in my sig, enjoy! :P

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I'm actually thinking about making a sort of very short concept album, or a song with 8 separate movements which would be separate tracks, however you'd want to look at it. I'd imagine it'll probably end up being 15 - 20 minutes the way I'm thinking of it. I've been posting some of my songs in the "Original Song Thread" but they have no lyrics, which these would, assuming I can bring this into a reality... I imagine I'd also be recording some rough guitar tracks to go along with it, even though my mic is terrible and distorts and low pitched or mid-low notes beyond recognition. But in any case, here's how I was thinking about setting it up:

LUCID NIGHTMARE
I.Humanity
II.Daemon
III.Possession
IV.Void
V.Transformation
VI.Corruption
VII.Descent (of the Archangel)
VIII.Judgement

Part 1 is a man singing in past tense about his life. He has great ambitions but sees no way to bring them to reality, even though he knows he has a great deal of potential. He is completely bored with life and sick of what his has become. One night he goes to sleep while contemplating suicide. Song is fairly happy and energetic overall until near the end, where it progresses to a softer, slower, and darker sound.

Part 2 is from the point of view of a demon, who sees the man, and all his wasted potential. I'd really want some deep growls akin to maybe Opeth vocals for the demon... in fact he'd be perfect for the clean vocals too >.<

Part 3 is instrumental and besically is an aesthetic representation of one's sanity and all sense of self being torn from them.

Part 4 is soft, very little instrumentation, very atmospheric. Whispered vocals from the point of view of the human describe how there is no sensory perception, no sight, hearing, feeling, all there is is what exists within his mind. He searches within his mind, which is a vast blackness just as the world he is now within. he eventually finds the form of himself, but he is unable to approach it. he continues searching the darkness for some form of substance and eventually sees within his mind's eye the silhouette of the demon.

Part 5 the man describes filling the demon's empty form with his own essence. He can feel it's power, and marvels at all he can manage with it.

Part 6 the man is now telling of how he became corrupted with power, tormented humans, and made every being he encountered bow before him. He became a tyrant whom all obeyed, and slaughtered the demon who was within his own original body. He then knows he may have the power to become an archdemon.

Part 7 starts with the man describing how he saw the skies open up, and a great light poured forth from it. A new kind of fear entered his heart, very different from the fear he felt at the approach of the demon. The song then shifts to the point of view of an archangel descending from Zion to rid the world of a demon who has been plagueing mankind. For this voice I'm picturing a power-metal type vocalist, one with a very powerful vocalist...perhaps one such as the guy from Therion. He informs the man/demon that he will be slain, and fed back to the flames of hell. From then on the song is a very energetic instrumental, lots of fast guitar solos and synth solos, lasting several minutes, mostly very melodic ones, with a lot of pentatonic scales and such, inerspersed with maybe some deep polyrhythmic chugs and "machine gun bursts," perhaps with a djent sound like one gets from a low tuned 7 or 8 string guitar. This song will be the longest, almost certainly, probably 5-6 minutes. I'm not all that good at making long songs.

Part 8 I haven't gotten completely figure dout yet, but probably fairly minimalistic, with some very deep and powerful sound effects set to a rhythm. The listener will realize the man who has been talking (singing) in the past tense was describing his sins, to be judged for eternal rhapsody or damnation, though he knows which he is destined for. I'm also toying with the idea that the man then awakens, revealing it all to have been a dream. I'm not sure if I want to do that, though... that kind of plot twist is far overused.

^Pretty nerdy stuff. I'll post lyrics when I write them if anyone's interested. I'm thinking Ayreon's recent albums have had an effect on me as a composer.
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**TheJackpotter** · Posted: Thu Mar 25, 2010 11:24 pm Post subject:

I already posted this lyrics on the Original Song Thread but I'll post them here:

Shitsoon (Monsoon parody):
I'm staring at my Beatles poster
And thinking of how glorious they were
And how they made all girls crazy for them

If only John Lennon wasn't dead
We'd still be able of listening to the good stuff
And most likely we wouldn't have Tokio Hotel

Chorus:
Riding through the shitsoon
I hope they die
And get eaten by a wolf
And then the wolf drowns
Along with Justin Bieber
And the Jonas Brothers
Then maybe music would be good again
I just hope that happens soon

Through the shitsoon
I hope they die soon

What the fuck is wrong with Bill?
He’s an authentic flat-chested girl
Who used to suck dick for 10€ along with Tom

I wish they were jews in World War II
And weren’t that famous around the world
So we wouldn’t have to hear about their death for over 2 months

(Chorus)
…And I mean REALLY, really soon
Through the shitsoon
(Fags!)
(A bunch of…)
(Fags!!!)
(A bunch of…)
They are the biggest fags ever
Shoving the drumsticks up their asses
If good people like John Lennon were murdered
Why can’t they be murdered too?

Just kill them, for God’s sake
They are wastes of sperm
Weren’t there condoms at the time?
I doubt it

(Chorus)
Through the shitsoon (x2)
I hope they die soon
Through the shitsoon
I hope they die… SOON!

I did a video with the lyrics. No vocals though, so if someone would sing this version I'd love it!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1qkORnXVPWw
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**mdizzy** · Posted: Thu Mar 25, 2010 11:30 pm Post subject:

Vocals you say? Lol that would be epic! I'd do it but I'm unfamiliar with the song
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